tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post2573515790415070417..comments2023-07-13T14:57:15.507-05:00Comments on SANGUINE MUSINGS: Birthday Blogfest (Don’t Worry Not Mine) EntryDanhttp://www.blogger.com/profile/01103849952547613477noreply@blogger.comBlogger9125tag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post-67080329130216559222011-01-23T11:41:27.339-06:002011-01-23T11:41:27.339-06:00Bittersweet and lovely piece you've given me h...Bittersweet and lovely piece you've given me here, Thank You SOOO Much for joining my Birthday Bash!!! <br /><br />You've done really well to introduce the characters and hint at the world they live in, just enough to bait the reader! I for one would definately buy the book if I read this little scene while out browsing. <br /><br />Thank you again, sorry I'm a little late commenting! <br /><br />T.xAnonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/11046724975658216337noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post-63733110975969802222011-01-22T17:39:50.474-06:002011-01-22T17:39:50.474-06:00Thanks everyone for the comments. I appreciate al...Thanks everyone for the comments. I appreciate all the kind words. Oh, and I realize I left out an important bit of info: the track season was cancelled due to bombing raids in the city.<br /><br />DanDanhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01103849952547613477noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post-76459341075185147152011-01-22T10:35:24.138-06:002011-01-22T10:35:24.138-06:00I have to agree with all these comments. Very good...I have to agree with all these comments. Very good job. What happens next? Thanks for sharing.Heather M. Gardnerhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/07232419331422866247noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post-25077225818515958352011-01-22T08:31:55.579-06:002011-01-22T08:31:55.579-06:00Hi,
Lovely piece of emotional gut-wrenching despa...Hi,<br /><br />Lovely piece of emotional gut-wrenching despair from the MC's POV! She really appeals for support, and one feels drawn toward her. ;)<br /><br />best<br />FFrancine Howarthhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/02326542867876257042noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post-85823911311907013392011-01-22T02:38:19.132-06:002011-01-22T02:38:19.132-06:00Oops, sorry. I didn't mean that to sound like...Oops, sorry. I didn't mean that to sound like a critique.<br /><br />I think its too late for me to be playing on the blogs.<br /><br />........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post-9507412606562062432011-01-22T02:35:25.608-06:002011-01-22T02:35:25.608-06:00What a lot of story is packed into these two chara...What a lot of story is packed into these two characters. Heartwarming, intense, conflicted. I'm committed to Thea - and that's hard to do in the first few paragraphs.<br /><br />Most writers want to be all action. Emotional tourmoil, if done well, can be a form of action, and capture the reader's sympathies for the reader at the same time. <br /><br />You did well here. I get a sense of Thea's world, both of the larger concept, and of her family, the issues she will face, the personal stakes.<br /><br />If this is a scene from your novel; wherever it is placed it is an excellent mix of tension and despair. It could be a beginning or an amping of the personal stakes.<br /><br />A well crafted scene.<br /><br />........dholedolorahhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/08715849844092553699noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post-5652844250745342842011-01-21T18:03:11.792-06:002011-01-21T18:03:11.792-06:00I loved how you pained the difficulties Thea exper...I loved how you pained the difficulties Thea experiences in this culture. You have created a very vivid image and made me wonder why. :)Anonymoushttps://www.blogger.com/profile/15459671422564355990noreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post-15837698414374322052011-01-21T17:19:24.017-06:002011-01-21T17:19:24.017-06:00The tension is good! I felt sorry for her - she wa...The tension is good! I felt sorry for her - she wanted to very very badlySoniahttp://storytreasury.wordpress.comnoreply@blogger.comtag:blogger.com,1999:blog-6123770321542501083.post-30059650928276079372011-01-21T12:20:53.213-06:002011-01-21T12:20:53.213-06:00But...but, why?! Very good tension building there....But...but, why?! Very good tension building there. I like the feeling of the dystopian otherworldliness (is that a word?) without being over the top. A nice read.Delia Moranhttps://www.blogger.com/profile/01957513773943040065noreply@blogger.com